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Friday, 29 June 2012

Ode of Joy



At the age of  11 or may be12 ,I loved reading Urdu Poet Nawab Mirza Khan Daag better known as Daag Dehlvi  He was a self-acknowledged romantic poet (shayar} but contrary to the impression one gets from his poetry, he eschewed wine. Usage of common words and phrases was distinctive of his style. Though i am no where near him but this is an attempt influenced by his style.





On ode to joy ,
No I am not being cynical ,
But have become lyrical ,
Have become like old wine .

Now don't be surprised ,if I make you feel shy
Am now in a different world
A world that's spherical ,
A miracle
I don't care, as long as am twined
With joy of being in your arms
Am ,enticed.

Now ,blow some air
I feel like a flute
With that feel of your lips ,
When they touch mine.

No ,now don't turn ,
Just look into my eyes ,
My heart , my soul , my body ,
Every chord is yours ,
My breath now waits for yours
to feel mine .

Drenched ,intoxicated ,bathed
In dew that's yours and mine ,
My eyes though closed , can still see the hue
When  I hear you murmur
"Cant get enough of you , where were you
while I  looked for you , didn't you know
you are made  for me ,you are mine
now come close , I want to hear you sigh "

I feel like Feni  like old wine ,
 Toast  before you spill this wine ,
Slightly bitter ,at times dry,
 But don't gulp ,go slow
like never before tried.
 Am here , hold me tight .

copy right (c)alka narula
photo credit photo bucket

30 comments:

  1. aah, this is as intoxicating as..."feni"!!Are you in Goa..? Loved this poem....
    "But don't gulp ,go slow
    like never before tried.
    Am here , hold me tight..." --Exquisite!
    Thanks for this treat:)

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    1. no panchalibolchi ,am not in Goa ..thanx fr liking :)

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  2. an excellent attempt I'd say...Although I've never heard of Daag sahab(unlucky me)...but thanks for u made me Google him... :) :) :)
    will surely have to spend time on some of his works...catchy one... :) :) :)

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  3. Loved it soooo much!cheers to feni and old wine!!

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  4. I am sure even Daag sahib would have said awesome ...


    Bikram's

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  5. I love every word of it... wow!

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    1. i hear your name while each nd evry word i write ,its c miracle that you hav cum into my life !

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  6. Nice, I loved the way you compared yourself with wine!

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  7. आपकी कविता दिल छु गई अल्का जी

    दाग दहेलवी मेरे पसंदीदा सायरों मे से है

    "लुत्फ़ इश्क़ में पाए हैं कि जी जानता है
    रंज भी इतने उठाए हैं कि जी जानता है

    जो ज़माने के सितम हैं वो ज़माना जाने
    तूने दिल इतने दुखाए हैं कि जी जानता है

    तुम नहीं जानते अब तक ये तुम्हारे अंदाज़
    वो मेरे दिल में समाए हैं कि जी जानता है

    इन्हीं क़दमों ने तुम्हारे इन्हीं क़दमों की क़सम
    ख़ाक में इतने मिलाए हैं कि जी जानता है"

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  8. Hmm....delicious....can we now say that "SHE MIRZA GHALIB" has arrived but with a english version ???

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    1. awwww u r tooo kind with yr words,thank u sooo mch :)

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  9. Some thing so intoxicating about Urdu..beautiful!

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  10. Alka you too are growing & glowing like old wine--so intoxicating.

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  11. Beautiful! I don't usually promote a post unless I go through, and comment.
    As you are in Goa, you might have known another kind of FENI that is medicinal!

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    1. thank you .......nooooooo am in delhi and a tru delhiite :)

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  12. ...loved it Alka, could easily understand, taste and relish the very essence of this wine..err..old wine:) It's intoxicating indeed:)

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  13. wow! your poems are far greater than my level of understanding. I feel like keep on reading them.
    Btw, alka ji im new to blogging. very much interested in reading and writing. you have any tips for me?

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    1. oh wow thank u sooo much for ur kind words:)haha,no tips as such just write from your heart:)

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  14. Amazing Alka :) i would be referring you as AA... :)

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