Friday night , I saw a shooting star ...and I heard a Willet call .... I couldn't stop my gaze, at sky ...I got so moved , that night .... it was in middle of night.....
The night was though , pitch dark...but shooting star , threw gush of light.....made me wonder.... why the sky was dark...and there were no .. stars in sky.....and where was the moon.... that night....Icouldn't hear..... a sound that night...and i heard..... the Willet call .... in middle of night....
I blinked my eyes..... at mesmerising that night....and I saw..... some one move behind the bush that night...I gaped and blinked that night...it was a Friday night...
I tip toed..... towards the bush and was sure....I am in , for a pleasant surprise....and I heard the Willet babble that night " don't let him go tonight " and we moved and jived that night...the shooting star smiled at us.. that night...it was a Friday night.copy right (c)alka narula
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I loved this one. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeletethank you soooo much rob.
DeleteI enjoyed it tooo.. critic well I cant say anything since I am not good at all this myself and have no idea how it shud be ..
ReplyDeleteI read and if it makes sense to me I like it :)
hey hey hey since you are writing lyrics I better get a autograph of urs , for one day when you become rich and famous you may be too busy to give us one :) he he heh
Bikram's
haha ...now stop pulling my leg bikram :)
ReplyDeleteYou mentioned someone moved behind the bush !! i thought it was a ghost story lol !! But nice post... writing poems is a different art !! ways to go
ReplyDeleteLOL...THANK YOU SHERIL.
DeleteBeautiful! :)
ReplyDeletethank you soooo much team-blogbee.
ReplyDeleteYour work is seriously very good. If you have a tune in your mind, sing it and put it on youtube! You are assured of many hits.
ReplyDeleteanupama ,thank you sooo much for dropping by and youe encouraging words
ReplyDeletegive it a tune... and a voice too...
ReplyDeletefrom the little i have started knowing about you, am certain you are versatile... go ahead
thank you sooooo much for your encouraging words @relax pleas
ReplyDeleteA fine experiment with surrealism Alka I believe.
ReplyDeleteyou know me so well amit...yes indeed !i am still not able to post comments kindly bear with me till i resolve the matter.
DeleteI do understand Alka, plz relax...I'm with you:)
DeletePS:waiting for the matter to be resolved soon though!
awesome !! simply awesome !
ReplyDeletethank you sooooo much rahul, you made my day !!
ReplyDeleteI think this is a very good attempt (attempt is not the right word...you have done well). This has its own intrinsic melody within and i thought a little improvisation can take this write anywhere.
ReplyDeleteahamsood ,thank you so much for your encouraging words !
DeleteNice.. Read something different. Good going!
ReplyDelete@rohanabstractedly...thank you sooooo much !!
Deletegood one! although i am not sure about certain words such as willet's babble and gush of light.
ReplyDelete@confusedyuppie ..thank you so much for liking it,well wollet is a bird , babble(chatter)has been used in the place of tweet,and gush of light -forceful flow (like gush of water)
DeleteWow, nice lyrics :) ... and then what happened?? what did Saturday night bring? :)
ReplyDeletebefore i share saturday night events let me thank you for your visit,joining the blog and for your kind words ;)
DeleteAnother cute and romantic piece Alka, loved it:)
ReplyDeletethank you soooooo much arnab.
DeleteThis is real good stuff ... I think you should write more ..
ReplyDeletethank you soooo much sangeeta , i loved your chapati post but could not post a comment...some problem persisting for some time now , i have still not been able to figure out the problem...
DeleteCouldnt understand what was it all about?But yeah really liked the theme of your blog.
ReplyDeleteshhhhh thats a secret .
DeleteWow, I really liked it :)
ReplyDeletethank you subhadra
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