Confound am baffled ,
what made you change your mind
that you pulled me out of the huddle ;
Now don't you turn around and say "you were puzzled ,
you are volatile , your mood swings are known ,
you are, at times mercurial"
You gave me no reason for your prejudice ,
nor told me why you made me go through vile ,
and why should i struggle like a lonely fish in a pond
unaware of the way out of the wild waters that had no flavour ;
Now when I feel safe and cuddled ,
his warmth is all that I feel around me
and the only thing I can hear is his heart beat ,
absolute silence away from multitude ,
his breath wrapped around me like vine
around a tree , I am in a state of contentment
now don't ruffle nor perturb
let me stay in this state ,
my prayer is profound ,
now don't you astound me ,
I hope I made my stand clear ,
I want no mayhem .
copy right (c)alka narula
photo credit photobucket
I loved the beginning of this poem Alka. The title is very apt.
ReplyDeletethank you saru :)
ReplyDeletesafety of the womb
ReplyDeletehmmmm no , his arms :)
Delete...fantastic indeed:)
ReplyDeletethank you amit :)
DeleteA great opening and a fantastic way to close with the final lines. Loved It!
ReplyDeletethank you shamsood
Deletesome lovely playing with words. :)
ReplyDelete-Harshal Gupta, http://unfurledlife.blogspot.in/
thank you harshal :)
DeleteWow. Really visceral. Liked the way you have broken the lines in the last verse.
ReplyDeletethank you subhorup :)
DeleteWell written. It gave me two feelings, which are strictly personal
ReplyDelete1. It started off with a mood to fight a big one, but later there was a realization that there's need to waste so much energy on that and it's better to speak out the point!!!
2. The lines find similarity with the nonrhythmic rhymes of Pink Floyd.
Please consider going through some of my poems and photographs.
sure asitav...well this is my conversation wid god :)
DeleteWell written! Nice way to start it off! I guess that's a state all of us want to be in! Good one Alka!
ReplyDeletethank you soooo much danny.
DeleteHi Alka
ReplyDeleteFormer love, new love
Fear of loss laced with fear of surrender
I quite enjoyed ... his breath wrapped around me like vine around a tree .... an ethereal wrap!
Interesting poem.
thank you jayadev:)
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